Thread:Rocketlauncher22/@comment-29711200-20160922031821/@comment-28926589-20161129222053

FirePyre wrote: SnowySilver wrote: Alright, this is that story continued. Hopefully the text isn't screwed up again.

The next evening, the Godfather brings the new Mafioso to meet the rest of the Mafia: A Consiglere,Consort,and Blackmailer.

The Consort laugs when the Godfather said that the girl was the new Mafioso. "She's twelve. She can barely kill a goldfish." In a second, the Consort was on the ground, the girl holding him down. " Don't test me, old man. I can end you." The Blackmailer chuckled and the Consiglere snorted.

"Now do you believe me?" The Godfather asks, keeping in a laugh. The Mafioso gets up, dusting off her dress. "Fine." The Consort says. The Consiglere silences them." There's a man two houses down.He's the spy. We need to take him down."

The Mafioso looks excited, but it quickly fades as the Blackmailer delivers news. " I heard that the BodyGuard was going to protect the spy tonight."

The Godfather sends the Mafioso to another person's house instead. As the scared girl enters the house, she sees the Veteran, sleeping in bed. She smirks, and with one swift move, he's gone. She returns to the Mafia, but nobody is there. She returns to sleep.

The next day, the town rejoices as they find the Serial Killer dead. The Blackmailer is quiet,as she was thinking about her plan. "LYNCH HER!" The Jailor yells out. The Blackmailer's eyes widen. "N-no, Please! I'm innocent!" She cries out as she is put on trial. "STOP!" The mafioso says. "I have proof she is innocent!" The spy whispers something to the Jailor and the Jailor nods. "She is innocent." The Jailor declares. The woman joins the town once more.

That night, as the girl is walking torwards her home, the Jailor grabs her by the wrists. She starts to tell, but the Jailor puts a finger to her mouth."Speak and you die." She bites him. "OW!" The Jailor yells. "What do you want from me?" She asks. The Jailor shoots a dart into her back and she falls down, unconcious. Some criticism.

Firstly, why is the consort male and also old? In case you forgot, canonically and also gameplay wise, the Consort is the mafia member who has sex with people for money and is definitely female.

Secondly, why is this 12-year-old girl all of the sudden okay with killing people for a living? She is literally 12, and she was approached with this offer a day ago. She would have been friends with some of the townies, hell she would have been friends with children of the townies, and yet she's suddenly okay with killing them? And just cause her mother died is no excuse.

Thirdly (and finally), what was the proof the mafioso has? She yelled out something very loud, and then the spy and the jailor had a talk despite the mafioso not actually saying what her proof was, and then they both agreed the blackmailer was innocent. What?

That's all for now. Yikes, I seriously forgot to think this through.

I'll probably start over.